All I'm asking for
Is that soft shower of comfort
That once soaked me through.
If it can't be mine,
I will clutch in my shaking fingers
A slice, a scrap,
A bare memory of courage.
I will grasp it closer to me than darkness
And wish it will suffice--
A tiny hope in the face of annihilation,
A whisper of love in the face of fear.
Let it heal me.
Very nice poem. Wish I had even a trickle of comfort.
Posted by: Pete at November 21, 2002 06:56 PMI like this poem but it could use a little work.
The first three lines are so pretty but 'that soft shower of comfort' is a little...I don't want to say vague, but...either in the next few lines or somewhere else in the poem I want to know specifically what you mean by that phrase OR see some image or hear some wordplay that will make me feel and understand that soft shower of comfort. See what I'm saying?
The next four lines are PERFECT, don't mess with them.
But I really don't like the next two lines--why is darkness so close--make me FEEL this, 'and wish it will suffice' is a bit clunky.
Lastly, 'a whisper of love in the face of fear' is a bit hokey for me and I found the previous line to be flat and prosiac.
I FEEL this poem in the lines that I like--they have power, but the other lines aren't nearly so powerful.
Thanks for letting me ramble on and post my opinion.
Not that you could stop me!!
Posted by: Michael at November 27, 2002 07:15 PMAnyone have the lyrics to 'Promise'?
Posted by: Bob at January 9, 2005 02:33 AM